题目
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
高分范文及解析
01
Is environmental improvement beyond individuals' ability? Or should we count on every individual and believe that individuals' little actions can make a difference? Neither of the two questions have a simple answer.
解析
* 开头段落的方案就是三言两语就结束。可以设计的玄机是设问,即自问自答。
* 开头段落的遣词造句不要过分讲究,也就是不要在选词的时候用力过猛。如果可以有一些习语性的表达或用词(比如本段中的beyond somebody's ability和count on),效果就很好。
02
Individuals may be incapable, in their knowledge and means, of solving environmental problems. This difficulty is evident in China during the recent time when a number of cities are asking residents to sort out household refuse before it is tossed. Not until this policy have many residents realized their lack of knowledge about the classification. More difficult than the lack of knowledge, people's lack of means is a bigger problem. Hardly can individual citizens be technologically or financially capable of solving environmental problems, since those problems are usually on a large scale or stubborn or the solution costs colossal amounts of money.
解析
* body部分的段回应个观点。
* 论证:可以说用一两句的举例来说一个现实的情况。注意:不要把整个段落写成就是在举一个例子。也可以讲明白一个道理。这个段落,两个展开段落内容的方法都用到了。
* 遣词造句:尤其注意两处倒装现象,以及状语形式的多样。
03
Recognizing the difficulties does not mean we are giving in to them. Little actions, such as tossing waste into the right bins, can reduce our impact on the environment; small changes, such as using fuel-efficient ways of transportation, can reduce our carbon footprints. In addition, although we are unable to improve manufacturing, which is a major source of pollution, we can choose products made of alternative materials whose use and disposal are easy on the environment, and as a result, businesses may become environmentally conscious about their production. Those efforts may seem insignificant on individual level, but they will lead to a tremendous change if we count more and more people in and let time prove the effect.
解析
* body部分的第二段回应第二个观点。
* 论证:可以说用一两句的举例来说一个现实的情况。注意:例子不要成为整个段落的内容。也可以讲明白一个道理。这个段落,两个办法都用到了。
* 遣词造句和文脉:尤其注意句子的设计并不浮华,但是句子之间的关系和衔接,让段落可以倍快速读完和容易理解。
04
In the face of environmental problems, we do not expect individuals to do everything, given the cost that is beyond individual capacity. We also believe that some of the things are within individuals' ability to do.
解析
* 结尾段落处不贪恋篇幅或者复杂的语言现象。回应了body部分提及的内容,起到总结的作用即可。
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