In some countries, too much money is spent by both the government and individuals on national festivals, such as New Year.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
从national festivals, such as New Year上可以看出来,观点可以与「文化」挂钩。
【立场】站「不同意」
注意点 1:观点要同时覆盖政府和个人两方面
注意点 2:“过多的”开销,too much极端词,站「不同意」
注意点 3:讨论是否存在这个现象,因此推导原因:即出于什么原因,有无过度开销,不能写这么做会带来什么利弊
【段落示范】
【立论】
1. As a matter of fact, most authorities and individuals allocate their incomes to traditional activities properly.
* 总起句。
2. A responsible state usually takes every foreseeable factor into consideration based on the scenarios that year and arranges the budgets reasonably.
* 政府层面:有责任心的政府会把上文的疫情等情况考虑在内来分配预算。
3. Meanwhile, as those festivals feature diverse historical and cultural customs, a nation, with globalisation progressing, needs them to celebrate its cultural brilliance and magnificence to make a distinction from other countries.
* 政府层面:有一定的理由需要有节制地庆祝节日。
4. Besides, individuals, who normally suffer from heavy working pressure, have the freedom to recharge their batteries during national holidays, and we should believe that a wise mature adult will never purchase blindly and render him or herself lost in debts simply owing to festival celebration.
* 个人层面:个人需要利用节日假期来娱乐,释放压力,且成熟的成年人也不会因为节日而盲目消费,导致债台高筑。
【解析】
1. 内容(Task Response)*** 特别重要 ***
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2. 组织(Coherence and Cohesion)*** 尤其重要 ***
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3. 词汇(Lexical Resource)
allocate…to… 为及物动词,意思是“分配…到…”。归类于“话题高频词”。
foreseeable 为形容词,意思是“可预见的”。归类于“通用词”。
feature 为及物动词,意思是“以…为特色”。归类于“通用词”。
brilliance 为不可数名词,意思是“明亮,灿烂”。归类于“通用词”。
magnificence 为不可数名词,意思是“壮丽,宏伟”。归类于“通用词”。
make a distinction from 为动词词组,意思是“有差别”。归类于“通用词”。
recharge their batteries 为动词词组,意思是“休息[放松]以恢复精力”。归类于“话题高频词”。
4. 语法(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)
第3句:as引导的原因状语从句 + with 引导的独立主格 + 主句 a nation needs…
第4句:主句为 individuals have the freedom… (中间插入 who 引导的非限定定语从句) + and 并列句 we should believe that + 宾语从句
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