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Question
Your professor is teaching a class on health. Write a post responding to the professor's question.
In your response, you should do the following:
express and support your opinion.
make a contribution to the discussion in your own words.
An effective response will contain at least 100 words.
Dr. Gupta
To continue our discussion of the health benefits of good nutrition, I'd like you to consider the broader topic of eating habits--not just what people eat and drink, but how often, how much, and when. Those who want to improve their health often begin by changing some kinds of eating habits. This includes a wide range of behaviors. What is one poor eating habit that would be important for most people to change, and why
Kelly
If people could start with one change to improve their eating habits, it would be to eat a better breakfast. Most people are so rushed in the morning that they don't take the time to sit down and eat a balanced meal. A good breakfast gives you more energy all day and keeps you from eating too much later on.
Paul
I think most people don't bother to learn much about the food that they eat. This ignorance is a kind of bad eating habit, It can be burdensome, but you should try to read every food package label. The more you can learn about what you're putting in your body, the more likely you'll be to make good decisions.
范文正文
I think Paul presented a reasonable suggestion by encouraging people to read food package labels. In fact, the information on food labels is designed to help consumers become savvy about their food choices. The front, back, and sides of a package are filled with information on what the food contains, which guide consumers in selecting healthier processed foods.【定语从句】 For one thing, reading the label allows people to understand how much saturated fat, sodium, and added sugars they will consume—nutrients that should be limited due to their association with adverse health effects.【同位语+定语从句】 For example, excessive intake of saturated fat increases the risk of developing cardiovascular disease and high blood pressure. For another, the label may also provide information about the additives used in the food. Although food additives, such as preservatives and coloring, are assessed by the authorities for potential harmful effects on human health before they are approved for use,【让步状语从句】 it is still advisable to check the label to ensure that the additives used in the food are safe.
写作思路和特色
本题是2025年4月26日的托福学术讨论真题,也是2024年6月30日考过的题目。这是一道典型的开放题,教授问两个学生,人们应该改变哪种不良的饮食习惯,为什么?Kelly认为应该养成好好吃早饭的习惯,而Paul建议人们看食品包装上的标签。同学们写这篇文章时,既可以选择支持两名学生的观点,也可以自己提出新的观点,有一定的自由发挥空间。
本文赞同Paul的看法。文章采用“总论点+解释1+举例+解释2”的结构。文章一开始提出总论点“鼓励人们阅读食品包装标签是一个合理的建议”。接下来先解释了一下食品包装上标签的位置和内容。通常它位于包装盒的正面、背面和侧面,其内容用来引导消费者选择更健康的食物。文章接着分别提出两个观点,论述阅读标签的必要性。首先,包装上的标签能让人们了解自己会摄入多少营养素,尤其是饱和脂肪、钠、添加糖等。这些营养素会给健康带来不良影响,应该减少摄入。文章进一步举例,指出摄入过多的饱和脂肪会增加患心血管疾病和高血压的风险。除此之外,阅读标签的另一个好处是能让消费者知晓食品中使用的添加剂。虽然政府相关部门会审查食品中使用的添加剂(比如防腐剂、色素)是否符合健康标准,但是消费者最好还是自己检查标签,以食品中使用的添加剂是安全的。
学术讨论作文的写作时间紧张,因此赞同题目中已给出的观点不失为一个形成思路的方法。而这道题中“阅读食品标签”的建议虽然合理,但是要想真正写出道理,还是需要考生具有相关背景知识和话题词汇储备。本文为考生提供了与营养素、食品添加剂相关的一些话题词汇,希望可以让大家写作时有话可说。
用词用语整理
food package label n. 食品包装标签
savvy adj. 具有实际知识的,有经验的
processed food n. 加工过的食品
saturated fat n. 饱和脂肪
而“不饱和脂肪”是unsaturated fat。
sodium n. 钠
added sugar n. 添加糖
adverse adj. 不利的,负面的,有害的
cardiovascular disease n. 心血管疾病
“cardio-”意为“心脏的”,而“vascular”是“血管的”。
food additive n. 食品添加剂
preservative n. 防腐剂
coloring n. 色素
【同位语+定语从句】
For one thing, reading the label allows people to understand how much saturated fat, sodium, and added sugars they will consume—nutrients that should be limited due to their association with adverse health effects.
这里提出了阅读食品包装标签的第一个好处,也就是能了解摄入的各类营养素的数量。后半句用破折号引出同位语“nutrients that should be limited”,解释了这三类营养素的特点,其中包括一个简短的定语从句。并随后给出限制摄入这些营养素的原因“their association with adverse health effects”。句子结构和用词简洁,论述层层深入。
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